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not bad i guess compared to most people that write poetry these days. youve got a very doggerel sounding rhymescheme and no meter or use of imagery or hidden meanings beneath the surface, in fact, its very “what you see is what you get” for lack of a better phrase, but its very light, almost comical at the same time, but for the love of God, please take out those “OH,” and “OH SO’s” and throw them in the trash, they really dont mesh well with the nature, or style of this poem
This is called a ‘hit poem’. But, it goes beyond a tiff…this is really GOOD, and can stand by itself as a true poem.
The end rhymes are not ‘forced’, the internal rhymes do it further justice, and you have some GREAT images here! Very original, creative, and fresh…THAT is great to read!
Whatever tiff you have going on, it has been the incentive for this really good work! Bravo!
Hahahahaha What a way you have with words and poetry, TD. Now if we could only take that raw talent and transform it into something like predicting the stock market, we could clean up and make Bill Gates move down a notch.
I didn’t make fun of you the other day, so I don’t know if this is for me or not. I never made fun of u though, so if it is sorry for the misunderstanding. If it’s not for me…sorry too.
you posted this the other day…but you’ve given it a name now. what did this ’steve’ do to deserve this then?
Not bad at all.
That ‘Steve’ sounds like someone I know.
not bad i guess compared to most people that write poetry these days. youve got a very doggerel sounding rhymescheme and no meter or use of imagery or hidden meanings beneath the surface, in fact, its very “what you see is what you get” for lack of a better phrase, but its very light, almost comical at the same time, but for the love of God, please take out those “OH,” and “OH SO’s” and throw them in the trash, they really dont mesh well with the nature, or style of this poem
This is called a ‘hit poem’. But, it goes beyond a tiff…this is really GOOD, and can stand by itself as a true poem.
The end rhymes are not ‘forced’, the internal rhymes do it further justice, and you have some GREAT images here! Very original, creative, and fresh…THAT is great to read!
Whatever tiff you have going on, it has been the incentive for this really good work! Bravo!
Elysabeth Faslund…Poemhunter.com
Hahahahaha What a way you have with words and poetry, TD. Now if we could only take that raw talent and transform it into something like predicting the stock market, we could clean up and make Bill Gates move down a notch.
Very funny!
I didn’t make fun of you the other day, so I don’t know if this is for me or not. I never made fun of u though, so if it is sorry for the misunderstanding. If it’s not for me…sorry too.